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ThatOneGuy
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since 10-27-2009
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Indiana, United States


0 posted 12-15-2009 03:58 PM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

I still want to work with it some, but just wanted to get it out here for now to get some feedback.
Walked Away


If you wonder why I never call
There’s something you should understand
You were the reason for my hardest fall
But where were you when I had to land?

I never thought you’d walk away
I thought we’d always make it through
I never thought I could feel this way
I fight back tears just seeing you

You taught me how to love
You always saw the best in me
The irony cuts me to the bone because
I now know how much i refused to see

I would have never guessed
I'd be waiting for my heart to mend
With you, i felt so blessed
And now the nights just won't end

You were my better half
The highlight of every day
You were the reason behind every laugh
How did it end this way?

I believed you every time you lied
I would have done anything for you to stay
I wiped away every tear you ever cried
But still you got up,
And walked away




[This message has been edited by ThatOneGuy (12-16-2009 10:37 PM).]

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m48
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1 posted 12-15-2009 04:11 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

wow. it painted a story and made some past feelings come up.very well written,this far any way.lol

ps i dont think i have read your work before so if you are new welcome.from m48
ThatOneGuy
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2 posted 12-15-2009 04:50 PM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

hey yeah i am new here and actually new to sharing anything i've written period. so it's a pretty different thing for me. and thanks for the feedback.
m48
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3 posted 12-16-2009 11:53 AM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

no prob. i was new once too and i also just made a come back a few weeks ago.so im kinda in the same boat.
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4 posted 12-16-2009 03:05 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

First off, Welcome To Passions!  I know you will enjoy sharing your work and making comments on others work to make some great friends.

The is was a wonderful first post, and if you will check your email - a special welcome awaits you from all of us here.

            
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ThatOneGuy
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5 posted 12-16-2009 10:38 PM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

I changed a couple things since I posted this the first time and added to it, what do you guys think? comments/suggestions?
minitechie
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since 05-26-2008
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6 posted 12-17-2009 01:45 PM       View Profile for minitechie   Email minitechie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for minitechie

Wow, dude, that is so cool. i can totaly relate to this situation. its happend to me one to many times. The flow is really good and the wording is great. very nice peice.

Harlequin's Queen and Diablo's Daughter.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland


7 posted 12-17-2009 11:36 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Wow..you made me cry. This is a brilliant write. Everything that was stated holds true for me. Especially these two lines;

"I never thought I could feel this way
I fight back tears just seeing you"

Brilliant first post, it well definitely be put in my library. I hope to read more soon.

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Leanne <3
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8 posted 12-18-2009 12:56 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

loved this one! great write
-Lee
ThatOneGuy
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9 posted 12-18-2009 02:50 AM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

thanks  guys
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