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Her beautiful symmetry

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watchingsummer
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0 posted 12-13-2009 07:57 PM       View Profile for watchingsummer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for watchingsummer

Her beautiful symmetry drew him in
The only chemistry we had
was to just be friends

But how could i compete with such a beautiful face
her strands of night put me in my place
i ran so far, but she won the race

Thinking back on all the feelings i had
the way he was still makes me mad
he was beautiful from what i could see and he thought no less of me
so why did our love stop short of perfection?
why do i see tears staining my complexion?

So smile in daytime, cry by night
til my memories fade and his smile isn't as bright.

toss away the pictures, burn up the pieces
unfold the old poems, tear along the creases

His beautiful symmetry drew me in
my tears now run down past my chin

i wonder if our time still makes his head swim
or if his new love has taken all of him,
all at once, or limb by limb?
was it planned out, or just on a whim?

i hope his light never starts to dim.

"If I know what love is, it is because of you." -Hermann Hesse

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m48
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1 posted 12-14-2009 05:02 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

i liked it it gave a story with a twist in the middle. well done.
watchingsummer
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2 posted 12-14-2009 07:14 PM       View Profile for watchingsummer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for watchingsummer

thanks!

"If I know what love is, it is because of you." -Hermann Hesse

m48
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3 posted 12-14-2009 08:18 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

youre very welcome!

my apsolute favorite part was the ending.
freeand2sexy
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4 posted 01-09-2010 01:29 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

A sad, but lovely poem. I really liked it!

“All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling.”--Oscar Wilde

zuratai
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5 posted 01-16-2010 03:57 PM       View Profile for zuratai   Email zuratai   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for zuratai

i really liked this good job.
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