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two men & black trench coat.

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m48
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0 posted 12-11-2009 11:47 AM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for m48

~honest critques on this please&thank you~


two men by my side
i call upon you both now
take these words an do what you will
but i must confess

this is my deal
you both have a place in my heart
i love you both apart
diffrent then just a year ago
now i see you for you
dont get me wrong
i love whats here

harder to explain then i thought i continue

i talk to you at night
as see him in days light
though paths cross frequently
no one looks suspiciously
at the situation
thinking is ok
driving me crazy
i fight a fight daily
loving two men
not the same way
i said to one
youre like a brother
to the other
i said something else
like those three little words
so seriously
i spoke

now i put my black trench coat on
wrap it tight around my heart
leaving only these words
to let you swim in
honestly these are my feelings
take them
leave them
i dont care
just listen to them please


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watchingsummer
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since 12-13-2009
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1 posted 12-13-2009 04:23 PM       View Profile for watchingsummer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for watchingsummer

i know how you feel, great poem. i loved how you used the black trench coat as a metaphor.

"If I know what love is, it is because of you." -Hermann Hesse

 
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