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All These Things I Hate, Revolve Around You!!

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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 12-07-2009 04:20 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine


Open up your pretty eyes
Youre drowning in your own disguise
Trapped inside this life you live
Theres nothing left of me to give

Strangled, suffocating in your fear
Theres nothing left for me up here
These broken words and selfish lies
Prove your not worth the sad goodbyes

Soulful, tainted, shadowed pasts
These prohibited loves they never last
Broken promises filled with doubt
Leave me trapped with no way out

With every breathe that i expire
I addfuel to your deadly fire
And every slip i seem to make
Is another blow i have to take

You don't see just who i am
Because you've never stopped to give a damn
I love you and you know i do
But lifes too hard when im with you

This life alone is killing me
But your to blind to really see
And all these things i love to hate
May just become a deadly fate

This childish war is all but won
I'm your daughter and he's your son
With all these lies we'll walk away
You lost your kids again today...

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1 posted 12-07-2009 01:46 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You know, this is an all to familiar story to quite a few.  The one good thing that comes from a period in life like this is the opportunity to become the best parent or grandparent you can be, as you know better.  It sounds crazy, but parents like these are the ones losing out, and that I find sad.

Well written.
RevengeIsMine
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Australia


2 posted 12-07-2009 03:55 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

Thankyou Misteria, It's always an honor to find your comments on my work.

Merry Christmas...
HersheyKiss
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since 06-02-2008
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New Jersey


3 posted 12-07-2009 09:58 PM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HersheyKiss

Jess. Miss you. How you been??

Poem well always fantastic. Exactly how I feel. You described it perfectly. Great write

-Dani
I am the arch angel
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4 posted 12-08-2009 07:24 PM       View Profile for I am the arch angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for I am the arch angel

such a tragedy beautifuly written
Leanne <3
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5 posted 12-09-2009 01:55 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

such a raw and honest poem!  really loved reading it.

stay strong
-Lee
m48
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6 posted 12-09-2009 01:38 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

well written. great expression, also what a story exspecially this time of year. wow. it took my breath away.
Belinda
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since 01-30-2006
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7 posted 12-10-2009 02:59 PM       View Profile for Belinda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Belinda

"You don't see just who i am
Because you've never stopped to give a damn
I love you and you know i do
But life�s too hard when i�m with you"

and the last stanza too, just wow.
You really do have a way with words,
Missed reading your work.
A sad story to read but an even sadder story to live through,  never lose hope.

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland


8 posted 12-12-2009 07:18 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Beautiful write Jess.
Miss you.

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
I have a pet unicorn...his name is Flavius, as in Flavius Belby. Flavius does not like gumballs..

precious pearls
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9 posted 12-12-2009 08:16 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

Loved it, absolutley beautiful!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

 
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