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Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
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N.S.W, Australia


0 posted 12-07-2009 02:09 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Leanne <3

Mum Iím sorry If i'm not perfect
And that Iíve never tried to be
Iím sorry that I canít be anything
Other than the disappointment you call me.

Mum Iím sorry that when I was younger
I hit the bottle hard
But you taught me pain from the start
And I guess it threw me off guard.

Mum Iím sorry I couldnít agree
With the way you treated everyone
And Iím sorry for the paddy wagons
That brought me home undone.

And Mum Iím sorry for that time
I licked the icing spoon
I know i promised that I wouldnít
But id spoken way too soon.

Mum Iím sorry if Iím not very good
At pretending that everythingís ok
I know I donít always play by your rules
But not everything can go your way.

Mum Iím sorry if I cry sometimes
When youíre yelling in my face
But sometimes it gets pretty hard
To hit the ground with grace.

Mum Iím sorry that you hate me
And that Iíll never deserve your love
I really did try to be a daughter
That you were always going to be proud of.

So Mum I'm sorry that Iím not perfect
But I donít think I want to be
Because the only time i can be happy
Is when I am free to be just me.


Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years Ė Thomas Har
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RevengeIsMine
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since 07-08-2006
Posts 832
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1 posted 12-07-2009 04:27 AM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

argh this hits home SO FREAKING MUCH.. i hate not being good enough.. but it's not the point if you have to be somebody you're not..

GREAT write...

I love you Lee.. just the way you are!!
Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
Posts 217
N.S.W, Australia


2 posted 12-08-2009 07:04 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

aww love u too Jess   and thanks for the feedback, its hard with mums like that aye, i think half the time i'm raising her.

Hope everythings going good for you.
xx
precious pearls
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since 07-24-2009
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3 posted 12-12-2009 08:04 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

loved it!!! could really relate, my grandmother does the same thing sometimes, and the way you described it was the way I feel EXACTLY! beautiful, extraordinary poem

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

Zeigeist
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since 12-09-2009
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4 posted 12-12-2009 09:35 PM       View Profile for Zeigeist   Email Zeigeist   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Zeigeist

A wonderful write filled with emotion and introspection. I love it.

I saw one line that the flow was kinda interupted.

Mum Iím sorry that you hate me
And that Iíll never deserve your love
I really did try to be a daughter
That you were always going to be proud of.

( that you would always be proud of.

try replace the last line with that and see how it sounds to ya.

Zeitgeist.
ThatOneGuy
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since 10-27-2009
Posts 32
Indiana, United States


5 posted 12-15-2009 04:13 PM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

this is one of the better poems i've read. i really really like your writing you are very talented.
m48
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since 12-02-2009
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6 posted 12-15-2009 04:16 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

again what a story i liked the last verse.
i would want to be fake perfect for any one either, even my mother.

kudos on the write.
 
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