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the_inner_me11
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since 2009-05-12
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0 posted 2009-12-03 09:43 PM


*Comment please.(=


You shall never know the pain I held,
The tears I cried,
The hurt I felt inside.
Within my shaking hands I hold memories of my former self,
I was broken,
Dying,
Screaming for someone to help.
Below my layers lies a sad little girl,
A faint reminder of that old state of me,
The naive girl I used to be.
I knew nothing but pain,
Lost love,
And tainted lies.
Then I met you.
Your body blew my mind like a shot to the head,
Your smile shone brighter than the summer sun.
You gave me hope,
I felt that someday I could love again,
That happiness was no longer just a dreamers joke.
I can't thank you enough,
For you glued back the pieces of my broken heart,
Never minding that my edges were sharp.
You'll never understand to what extent do I love you,
For if you did I would be afraid I'd lose you too.

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I am the arch angel
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since 2008-02-02
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1 posted 2009-12-05 12:04 PM


wooow! this is hella good
precious pearls
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since 2009-07-24
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2 posted 2009-12-06 01:21 PM


OMG that was sooooo good!
the_inner_me11
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since 2009-05-12
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3 posted 2009-12-06 10:03 PM


Thank you.(=
UNTAMEDelegance
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since 2009-05-30
Posts 222
Oregon
4 posted 2009-12-07 02:41 PM


WOW... that was me. That was me before I found him. Thank you SO SO much for writing this. It's amazing feeling to see my exact feelings written into word. This is a beautiful, powerful write. I like your style very much!=^.^=
~UNTAMEDelegance

m48
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since 2009-12-02
Posts 108

5 posted 2009-12-09 01:43 PM


i know exactly where you are comming from in this. i have someone simular in my life as we speak and he has no idea how much he means to me its so hard to put into words or anything really. nicely written.
the_inner_me11
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since 2009-05-12
Posts 15

6 posted 2009-12-09 09:31 PM


Thank you. Im so happy you could relate.(=
Belinda
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since 2006-01-30
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7 posted 2009-12-10 02:53 PM


Just remembered why I used to come on this forum so much, great write. I loved the rhythm.

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

ThatOneGuy
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since 2009-10-27
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Indiana, United States
8 posted 2009-12-15 04:02 PM


wow that is really good i like it a lot! you have a really good flow to your writing
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