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m48
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0 posted 2009-12-02 04:12 PM



please note this is a simular poem to another written on this very forum but i am the same writer and i just wanted to make this poem my first under my new name thats all.

its been a year past now
comming upon the second winter of your company
though still a well kept secret
you swim inside me
only i know your idenity
thats what you asked of me
the time and things we have shared
echo in my heart
when i dream i see your face
it works
keeping the nightsmares and evil things at bay
you are stronger now then before
sharing more
i love you this way
open not like a book or novel
but a secret just for me
sweetest of dreams my dark angel
youre enough light for me


[This message has been edited by m48 (12-03-2009 03:04 PM).]

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I am the arch angel
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1 posted 2009-12-02 07:07 PM


i like the storyline, but it seemed to mislead me a bit, tricky tricky, your poem is a ninja
m48
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2 posted 2009-12-03 04:08 PM


thank you! but how did my poem mis lead you?
I am the arch angel
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3 posted 2009-12-03 08:32 PM


it liked changed topics for a second but then got back on subject
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4 posted 2009-12-07 01:54 PM


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