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Ravagence
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since 2009-08-16
Posts 79


0 posted 2009-11-30 04:02 PM


I have to poems here. One's a haiku so I am including it with my main one.

Untitled

I knew it was my job,
I should have found a way out.
Found a way to save us all,
from and impending wall of flames.
Licking our heels,
singed clothes.
Ankles buckling,
nearing a dead end.
Yet we don't stop,
although death is,
in fact; sure.
We run for as long as we can,
Not to escape the flames,
but to finish our prayers,
before death.


Moral Haiku

Self esteem, a joke.
Too much has corroded your morals.
Left with out a trace.

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Stitches
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since 2009-11-27
Posts 159
United Kingdom
1 posted 2009-11-30 07:23 PM


I like it.

Titles maybe:
-Retribution
-Incineration
-Purge

'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.'

m48
Member
since 2009-12-02
Posts 108

2 posted 2009-12-03 02:58 PM


i enjoyed the second peice the best. um a title idea could be simply not so simple. i use odd titles for my poems.

ps could u read my poem my name is m48.

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