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HersheyKiss
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since 06-02-2008
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New Jersey


0 posted 11-29-2009 05:16 PM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for HersheyKiss

Theres just so much on my mind right now I can't even explain. Please let me know what you think of this piece.

YOUR LIFE OUR WOES:

Your words seem slurred and jumbled
As if you're not making any sense
Eyes red like you're lacking sleep
And you always seem to be tense

Too bad you can't see yourself
When you're in such a state
Couldn't you ever come home sober?
For that day I'll have to wait

Shattered dreams and a broken home
It's all you've ever given us
The good memories we've shared with you
Are replaced with the not so wondrous

A father you've never been to us
A husband my mother once knew
You've spent more time in bars than home
With us it's less than a few

What happened to our lives together
Why did you throw it all away?
We'd be there if only you'd say the word
But liquor can't comfort you till you're gray.

All our savings, every single dime
You've squandered away with ease
Spent on alcohol throughout the years
You couldn't stop even when we begged please

There were also the times of violence
When you would throw things around
Cursing us for no apparent reason
As if you picked us up from the dog pound

What did we do to deserve this treatment?
Our whole lives are filled with dread
If only you could feel what we did
You'd understand the words I've said

But now I've grown up, it's far too late
The damage is already done
I'll never regain lost childhood days
And who knows what my brother will become

I've learned from you in a different way
Alcohol is my sworn enemy
Sorry to say I don't want to be like you
To me the most important thing is family.
© Copyright 2009 Danielle - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
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since 07-08-2006
Posts 832
Australia


1 posted 11-29-2009 07:36 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

This is a great great poem Dani.. and i know the feeling..

You'll get by hunni.. your one of the strongest people i know!!

Love and Hugs,
Jess
HersheyKiss
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Posts 137
New Jersey


2 posted 11-29-2009 08:00 PM       View Profile for HersheyKiss   Email HersheyKiss   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HersheyKiss

I used to be strong not so much anymore...

Anywho Jess!!! How are you?? How is everything? Please update me on how Amelia is doing.
Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
Posts 217
N.S.W, Australia


3 posted 11-29-2009 09:12 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

From what Iíve gathered from this poem, youíve chosen a different path from your father, and stuck by your beliefs even through the hardest of times, that shows incredible strength!

Enjoyed this one a lot, take care
-Lee
precious pearls
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4 posted 12-12-2009 07:55 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

OMG danielle it was so beautiful... made me wanna cry for you... but out of sorrow and out of pride. I'm so proud you've made it through dani and i kno you'll continue to meet your goals...
-Kai
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