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RevengeIsMine
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since 07-08-2006
Posts 832
Australia


0 posted 11-28-2009 11:47 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for RevengeIsMine


A lost cause that never finds
Troubled dreams and faded lines
Forever drowning and cursed to be
Losing touch and touched to see

Tortured mind and hungered soul
Loss of love, burnt out coal
Tears of acid running dry
Reality fading as I cry

Hollow screams echo here
Smell of never ending fear
Smile of chaos, burning blood
Lies of misery, sound of mud

False hope and blinding pain
Courage hiding and bravery drained
Sighs of passion thirsting for life
Blurry visions an ending strife

Imprisoned happiness locked up tight
Lost the key, end of sight
Whispering voices a trembling sound
Fading faces that can not be found

Deceiving friends, family of solitude
Fake smiles and false gratitude
Lingering worry and deafening silence
Forgotten hurt scars of violence

Thoughts of madness feelings of war
Captured imagination becoming sore
Moving images, captivating danger
Alluring time reflecting a stranger

Cruel sincerity a broken sign
Blaming judgement, wisdom of mine
Sightless scars, devastating disasters
Unconscious loyalty confiding masters

Ignored death, unheard scream
Infinate forever, listless dream
Apathetic wishes, selfish lies
A selfless prayer with no reply
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precious pearls
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since 07-24-2009
Posts 110
NJ; United States


1 posted 11-29-2009 12:08 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

OMG it was soooo good... i really felt ur pain, u described everything sooo beautifully...
"Tortured mind and hungered soul
Loss of love, burnt out coal
Tears of acid running dry
Reality fading as I cry"
-that was my fav line cuz i can really relate!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

Stitches
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since 11-27-2009
Posts 151
United Kingdom


2 posted 11-29-2009 06:53 PM       View Profile for Stitches   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Stitches

Touching.

x

'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.'

Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
Posts 217
N.S.W, Australia


3 posted 11-29-2009 09:16 PM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

All I can say is Wow, you did such a great job with this one. Definitely one of my favourites!
-Lee
XxForever.BrokenxX
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Neverland


4 posted 11-30-2009 09:22 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

miss you Jess.
give Amelia a big hug for me.



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EmilyTheStrange
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ThatOneGuy
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since 10-27-2009
Posts 32
Indiana, United States


5 posted 12-15-2009 09:38 PM       View Profile for ThatOneGuy   Email ThatOneGuy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ThatOneGuy

this is really well written i like it. you described everything really well it painted a really clear picture while reading it.
m48
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6 posted 12-16-2009 12:02 PM       View Profile for m48   Email m48   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for m48

a picture painted.for sure a great poem.
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British Columbia, Canada


7 posted 12-16-2009 03:08 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You did a great job on this one, and it flows beautifully, as well as setting a very poignant and heartfelt scene.  Well done!

            
Happy Holidays
♥ Mysteria ♥

Jaki H
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NJ, USA


8 posted 12-19-2009 12:54 PM       View Profile for Jaki H   Email Jaki H   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jaki H

beautiful!!!! the poem has such a rhythm to it!
Snow_Angel
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9 posted 12-19-2009 07:03 PM       View Profile for Snow_Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Snow_Angel

This is so beautiful.
It really makes me feel the pain that you are describing.
 
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