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This is the after math of being inspired to draw a candy themed drawing, Jeffree Star's "Queen of the Club Scene", while chewing on a candy cane.   Enjoy?


Candy Coated Misery


You love your candy coated misery
And have a willingness to share
Those little heartache candy
Drizzled up in their despair

Wrapped in plastic disguise
Tie in their rainbow bows
Selling them for half a conscious
To all your loving foes

Smile a grin sweet as they taste
That nightmare reality of yours
Break their caramelized smile
They desperately try to restore

You love your candy coated chaos
Show them what's lurking inside
Not a gooey filling; but pain
That you refuse to hide
© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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wow zach, this has got to be probably one of the best i'v EVER read from you.
it has everything wonderfully amazing in it.
the style, the wording, the TITLE, and just the plain theme was very interesting to read.
i loved it!

library.

julianna

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2 posted 11-14-2009 12:15 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thanks Julianna!!
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Pretty good stuff, Zach.  Your poetry is interesting and I see so much growth in the construction.

Alison
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Thanks? Lol
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WOW! i loved it... it made me feel like I was eight again, reading Charlie and The Chocolate Factory!

the metaphor is brilliant! and i like how it doesn't really have a happy ending, a twist in the tale?

Lost girl..

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I really, really like this. I especially loved the first 2 stanzas. Lovely imagery and play on words. I felt the rythm was a little out in places, interrupting the flow. But overall, a good write.
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Thanks everyone!

*gasp!* Octave comments my poem. :O lol. Thanks alot! Yes I'm not really good at rhythm. Each time I try to even it out I end up not being able to find the right words to say what I wanted.

-Zach
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A wonderful write, Zach! I loved it!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

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Both the meaning and words are lovely.

Some great imagery.

I liked the last best.

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10 posted 05-09-2010 11:35 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thank you all for commenting! This by far is one of my favorites.

-Zach

okay... so I love strangers with candy :)

 
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