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All Of Me... (For All The People We Can't Live Without)
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All Of Me... (For All The People We Can't Live Without) |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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Okay so the rhymings off.. and it probably sucks but atm.. it's the only words kicking in my head.. ________________ Is there a cure for this pain Maybe i should have something to eat Food won't take this emptyness away I'm too tired to admit defeat Seem's i've made it through another day Here in this cold room On scraps and pieces left behind I survive on the memory of you All of me is all for you You're the blood i seem to bleed All of me is all for you Your the only one i'll ever need Is there a remedy for waiting For Loves victorious return Is there a remedy for hating Every second that i'm without you All of me is all for you You're the blood i seem to bleed All of me is all for you Your the only one i'll ever need All this life is all for love It's the only road i'll choose Out of every street and avenue Only one will lead me to you I've kept all of me just for you You're the air i live and breathe trapped here in this emptiness I wish you never had to leave Seem's i've made it through another day Trapped here in this cold and empty room With scraps and pieces left behind I survive on the memory of you |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
wow, jess such deep compassionate words, i wish i could put words together like you. such perfect harmony, this could be a good song. amazing writing from an amazing mind, good job |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
Wow, this is really, really good Jess. Library for sure.  love you. {~~*~~} EmilyTheStrange |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Amazing as always.  Love ya-Zach |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
nicely done~~ one little correction needed...whenever you are using Your and mean "you are" you need to write it you're. You did this sometimes but not all the times when needed.  M |
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precious pearls Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110NJ; United States |
wow... it was sooo pretty.... loved how you were so honest and yet the words still flowed... awesome poem! Always, |
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