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Leanne <3
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Ive put the kids to bed
Kissed them both goodnight
Told them youd be home soon
Praying; please let it be tonight.

The loneliness surrounds me
As I falter to the floor
The beds been made for months now
Since the day you went to war.

The floor boards scream with silence
Echoing through my veins,
I wait for the sound of your footsteps
But the heartbreaking static remains.

My body grows tired
But my heart cant help but wait
Wishing praying hoping praying
That this war is not your fate.

I peel myself from the floor
As begins another day
Fooling myself once again;
I tell the mirror:
I am okay.

Inside this exterior, over which the eye might have roved there was the record of a pulsing life, which had learnt too well for its years Thomas Har

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1 posted 10-30-2009 01:34 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I hate to think how many women are waking tomorrow morning with these exact same thoughts.  I can't think of any more powerless thing that war.  A very well done and poignant poem.
Leanne <3
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2 posted 10-30-2009 01:47 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

Thanks heaps.  I agree, theres nothing quite as devastating as a war, and those left behind.
RevengeIsMine
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3 posted 11-02-2009 07:24 PM       View Profile for RevengeIsMine   Email RevengeIsMine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for RevengeIsMine

WOW i love this.. so honest and raw.. you're an amazing writer..
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4 posted 11-03-2009 04:39 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

beautiful write hon.
Krysti
Leanne <3
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thankyou for your comments much appreciated.
xx
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I am enjoying your words~~

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7 posted 11-07-2009 10:42 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

"The floor boards scream with silence
Echoing through my veins,
I wait for the sound of your footsteps
But the heartbreaking static remains."

My favorite stanza
Leanne <3
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thankyou guys
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def. one of the best on here!!! so much emotion, so much pain.... so much sorrow...
i love how you put everything flowing
and i commend you on being strong for your children
-kai
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Lovely,

Captures that vain hope, strength and selflessness perfectly I think.

'I feel like an animal, and I don't think that I get it. But one day I'll see you around.'

ThatOneGuy
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that is really really good. i know a lot of people close to me at war right now and that really spoke to me. You are a very good writer
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what a story. like novel id read more of.also your strength i amazing.
 
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