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UNTAMEDelegance
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since 2009-05-30
Posts 222
Oregon

0 posted 2009-10-26 11:06 PM


Whirling and twirling
Spinning and swirling.
A dizzying,
maddening dance.

Calling and falling
Flying and malling
trying to
keep your stance.

You're spinning around
with your head all awhirl

As the merry-go-round
that you're on starts to twirl.

The world starts to slow
then your friend starts to push

And the dizzying goes
and you fly with a whoosh.
In a dizzying, maddening dance.

Going and flowing
Spinning and slowing.
A dizzying,
maddening dance.

Screaming and speeding
Laughing and leading
trying to
keep your stance.

You're spinning around,
but you're starting to slow.

It's your turn to push
and you're itching to go.

You start spinning 'round.
You push with your all.

Then you try to jump on...
WHOOSH!
SLIP!
BAM!

You fall.
In a dizzying,
maddening dance.

© Copyright 2009 Melissa ReneĆ© Axtell - All Rights Reserved
Thick_Goddness_973
Junior Member
since 2009-10-25
Posts 13

1 posted 2009-10-29 08:26 PM


vry uplifting, very up key, very fast paced... made me feel like i'm really there dancing and letting go of all my worries....
loved it


precious pearls
Member
since 2009-07-24
Posts 110
NJ; United States
2 posted 2009-10-29 08:33 PM


i agree... u could really taste the happiness and freedom

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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