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XxForever.BrokenxX
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0 posted 2009-10-10 05:14 PM


I have a fear of open water, as in lakes and oceans and stuff. I hadn't written about it before so I decided to give it a try. So yeah..i think it's kind of lame but whatever.
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Deep dark water,
hold on to what you have.
I know of all your secrets,
I've seen into your past.

Compelling little Terror,
I know of what you think.
I'm not coming closer,
I don't want to sink.

Most of all in you,
I hate your murky tone.
Instead of understanding,
all I see is stone.

I know that underneath your beauty,
your not calm as they say.
No I wont come any closer,
I wont be whisked away.


{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
...popsicle!

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priyanka
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since 2009-06-15
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india
1 posted 2009-10-10 06:20 PM


Wow! just plain fantastic!
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2 posted 2009-10-10 10:04 PM


I didn't know you had a fear of deep water! :O
But this poem was nice. I like the third stanza.

-Zach

XxForever.BrokenxX
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3 posted 2009-10-10 10:28 PM


Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
The replies are much appreciated.

{~~*~~}

EmilyTheStrange
{~~*~~}
...popsicle!

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