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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


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On the spot free verse 5


Tremble. Trim bull.
Threaten the sky with oaths of rage.
Point out each cloud and marred by thunder.

Rain drops striking like blue sight dots.
Painted targets for a man on a trigger surge.

Tremble and sew the thimble.
Hide your secrets in the cashe-laden silk.
Don't look for anymore thoughts without a warrant.
Seek first the kingdom or watch as it steps down, sole foot.

Crazy highs and bloody torn wounds.
All the world trembling without a thought forward.
Fools can carve out smiles when
there's no one to care.

Creamed face glaring, peering, staring, reluctant
to give up the rights to prohibit.


10/5/09
6:54 PM - 6:58 PM
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kindredspirit
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1 posted 10-08-2009 11:50 AM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

I love it! Writing freely obviously brings out the best in your creativity, and this paints deep word pictures.
I especially liked the line "Fools can carve out smiles when
there's no one to care." -Quite profound, made me think.
priyanka
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india


2 posted 10-09-2009 11:38 AM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

I agree with kindredspirit...
You're plain genius!!

great wite...
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