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flyinwiild
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0 posted 10-07-2009 04:14 PM       View Profile for flyinwiild   Email flyinwiild   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for flyinwiild



you spoke your words, i spoke the same, you said my words were wrong.
you let go, then i did too, you claimed i was at fault.

you dont listen, so i dont listen, you say im the only one.
you live your life so i live mine, but you still hold me down.

so you gave up, but i gave in, you'll always blame this girl.
i walk away, and you can't follow, now you face the mirror.


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1 posted 10-08-2009 02:24 AM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

First off, when it says "bridge", does this refer to a song? Possibly a song that you might be working on? If so, then I hope to see the rest of it! :]

As for the piece itself: I like how it hints at the problem, but doesn't explicitly state it. I get the general idea from the writing, but I'm left to my own conclusion. The flow was fairly simple, but then again, if its part of a song, its 'cause I don't know how it should really sound.

Thanks for sharing!

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