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priyanka
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0 posted 10-05-2009 05:13 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for priyanka

Damnation, these memories!

The night is gone
The morning begun
But in my heart I wish memories can be undone
To be left with none

Oh! what I call these memories
They did no good, my mind at seas
Thoughts keep buzzing like honey bees
Sweet oblivion, it never cease

They cause nothing but stinging pains
Lurking shadows, leaving stains
These memories- they are my chains
Invisible binding to insane, disdain

Contempt, strong I feel
To them I'm just another small meal
My fate they seal
They have left nothing to heal

Sweet memories remind this bad day
I'm taken without a say
To choose the stillness and lay
To leave every memory that make me go astray

Mystified by stillness
Oblivion? yes, but no cess
Leave my life to a paltry guess
Memories! they are such a mess

Damnation, these memories!
* cess in Irish English(informal) means luck


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XxForever.BrokenxX
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1 posted 10-05-2009 07:03 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

Nice write, I know how you feel.

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EmilyTheStrange
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priyanka
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2 posted 10-05-2009 07:12 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

thank you
glad you liked it
Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal


3 posted 10-05-2009 09:09 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

I felt a strong sense of disdain in your words. It was like one of those etch-a-sketches bursting open and flooding my mind with stencil sketches.

However, most of the rhyme scheme seemed a bit forced. Although some places were cleverly used, the entire piece just didn't seemed to flow in my eyes... Of course, its your piece, so do as you will! ^_^'
Thanks for sharing!

There is power in the pen.

priyanka
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4 posted 10-06-2009 11:13 AM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

Ah! What you say is right...
But then I wouldn't say most of it...
I started off with something in mind and had to add bits and pieces here and there to make it sound complete...
You're real clever to catch it.

To be specific the fourth stanza...

Thank you for your thoughts...I shall keep it in mind when I write others...
priyanka
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5 posted 10-03-2011 06:48 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

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