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Watch them glitter in the sun
The morning dew, forming in her eyes
Tears fall slowly; her voice in a quiver
As you try to look past the lies

Her lips move yet words mean little
Managing to hold her poise well
Her promises held against her
Your mind and heart compelled

She's got you in a vice
Constricted in your own shame
Taken her back unconsciously
Now who's the one to blame?

What happened to true love?
The one you longed and yearned
Was it worth the flight?
In the end to crash and burn





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"her voice in a quiver
As you try to look past the lies

Her lips move yet words mean little
Managing to hold her poise well"

Though they aren't part of the same stanza, these two parts spoke out to me. Even though the described girl is in a weakened state, she holds her ground.

I also loved the last two lines. How many times have I asked myself something similar?

Thanks for posting.

There is power in the pen.

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Thanks for reading.
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Excellent Zack!  I think over time we all have had a crash a burn, and was it worth it?  Yes, as you take from that relationship the things you like, and those you don't like, and will hopefully never do again.
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masterpiece, excellent. great word choice. i wish i was that good with words
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Thanks Mysteria and Keagan!

Mysteria: Yeah I know what you mean. It took me a while to realize that every relationship and experience, good or bad, I've learned from them. So there's an upside to ever down on.

Keagan: Dude thanks but I know you can beat me without even trying. :P

-Zach
 
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