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kindredspirit
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0 posted 2009-10-02 11:44 AM


Surrender

Addition submission a beauty so obscene
Attraction distraction frenetically serene
Collision division chaotic past elite
Fictional conviction while swaying inside the beat
Elation frustration barriers thin and strong
Devotion a notion devoid of right or wrong
Connection recollection with the smell of cigarettes
Inflection tension plays like Russian roulette
Friction addiction climax in disguise
Emission submission in choosing her demise.

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1 posted 2009-10-02 05:26 PM


WOAH THIS WAS GREAT
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2 posted 2009-10-08 02:45 AM


Short and powerful. (Lol, sounds like I'm describing myself...)

Anyway, well done! Loved how you included not just one rhyme per pair of sentences, but two! Library!

There is power in the pen.

kindredspirit
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3 posted 2009-10-08 11:48 AM


Assassin- Thankyou!! (I also am short and powerful, and enjoy it immensely.)
priyanka
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4 posted 2009-10-09 11:55 AM


wow! fantastic
kindredspirit
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5 posted 2009-10-10 12:20 PM


priyanka-- Muchas Gracias!
priyanka
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india
6 posted 2011-10-03 06:47 PM


How do you manage to write such a wonderful piece! I'm reading it back all over again and I'm awestruck!Again!
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