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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2009-09-29 12:05 PM



i want to punch
i want to scream
until i start to see
a bit of red peeking undernieth

i want to make sure you all know
that if you want to fight, then baby lets go

ill tear you up
and that isnt a lie
it just me
i was born to fight

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Octave
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since 2008-07-29
Posts 186
Highlands, Scotland.
1 posted 2009-09-30 03:19 PM


I quite liked this. The word 'peeking' kind of threw me. I don't know, it just seems like quite a quiet almost playful word. Maybe that's just me.
The ending packed a punch [no pun intended]. Really liked this.

Assassin_of_Verse
Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal
2 posted 2009-09-30 08:55 PM


I'm similar, but with words. (Though I don't mind getting physical.)

There is power in the pen.

priyanka
Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216
india
3 posted 2009-10-06 04:06 PM


aah...yes...fighting huh?
nice!

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