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oh my love oh my love
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oh my love oh my love |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
before i post this i want to say that this is a ballad poem or a story form i hope u guys enjoy it and tell me how it is i think that i somewhat did horrible at it but i dont know its hard ot decide Oh my love oh my love Why are you doing this to me Why are you avoiding me It seems like you are Tearing my soul apart Just tell me what have I done to you Oh my love oh my love Oh my dear oh my dear Please don’t take it The fallacious way I know how you feel But right now I have to be isolated from you One day you will understand Oh my dear oh my dear Oh my love oh my love Why do you have to be isolated from me Where are you going that im not aware of Cant you see how you are tormenting me Creating this excruciating wound Oh please tell me I cant take it anymore Oh my love oh my love Oh my dear oh my dear We shall be like strangers now Im going to a war And you might have a contingency Of loosing me I want you to be jubilant With all your heart Oh my dear oh my dear Oh my love oh my love Why oh why don’t leave me behind I don’t want that contingency I don’t want you to go I will be all dissipated Well you could just go ahead And I will wait for you Oh my love oh my love Oh my dear oh my dear This is our last goodbye This is our farewell I hope I come back soon And don’t cry Wish me luck Oh my dear oh my dear Oh my love oh my love I hope you come back too I will wait for you Bye my love Farewell Oh my love oh my love Seasons have passed by Years have passed by She has been waiting For her love to Come back But there is no sign She sits by the translucent Window Mourning each and everyday She has given her hope up She doesn’t talk to anyone She feels inexpressive And morbid She has no life She left her joy Inside her dead heart With that strenuous wound She’s trying to let time heal All of her wounds But finally she hears A knock on the door Knock knock Then she says Oh my love oh my love Is that you I have been waiting for you You don’t know how long It has been Please tell me its you Oh my love oh my love She opens the door And sees a dazzling Ravishing man And it is him The one shes waiting for Oh my dear oh my dear Yes it is me How long it has been The war was so gruesome Some people died You look pale and white How have you been I hope you havent been crying Oh my dear oh my dear Oh my love oh my love I have been fine All I wanted to was see you Finally I got to see you No one can separate us Now I shall always be true to you Since I cant find any better guy than you Oh my love oh my love Oh my dear oh my dear You look so fragile It looks like you lost some weight What did I do to you It seems so wrong I am regretting it But I had no choice Oh my dear oh my dear Oh my love oh my love Its all right don’t worry about it Im happy that you came back in My life All I need is a long hug from you I want you to touch me like You always do Lets get back to our normal lives Oh my dear oh my dear Finally she was happy that She got to see her husband Both of them had a happy ending They eat and sleep together And he is always there for her He regretted his choice Of not letting her come with him But if she were to come She would have died And he didn’t want the Most wonderful women Of his dreams to be gone |
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priyanka Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216india |
You just wow me with this one... Its so beautiful I always like happy endings Hope I'll someday be there LIKED IT A LOT |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Seems strong in the beginning. As for the middle, some of it seemed to break away from the style it started out with: "I don’t want that contingency I don’t want you to go I will be all dissipated" compared with "Since I cant find any better guy than you" It seemed a little off...However, it was sweet at the end and enjoyed. There is power in the pen. |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
thankkkks |
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maddorani1991 Junior Member
since 2013-03-21
Posts 20 |
I am maddorani I forgot the password of my maddorani account and I revised this poem into a better format. |
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