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maddorani
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since 11-18-2007
Posts 419
houston,tx


0 posted 09-28-2009 06:51 PM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for maddorani

before i post this i want to say that this is a ballad poem or a story form i hope u guys enjoy it and tell me how it is i think that i somewhat did horrible at it but i dont know its hard ot decide


Oh my love oh my love
Why are you doing this to me
Why are you avoiding me
It seems like you are
Tearing my soul apart
Just tell me what have
I done to you
Oh my love oh my love

Oh my dear oh my dear
Please donít take it
The fallacious way
I know how you feel
But right now
I have to be isolated from you
One day you will understand
Oh my dear oh my dear

Oh my love oh my love
Why do you have to be isolated from me
Where are you going that im not aware of
Cant you see how you are tormenting me
Creating this excruciating wound
Oh please tell me
I cant take it anymore
Oh my love oh my love

Oh my dear oh my dear
We shall be like strangers now
Im going to a war
And you might have a contingency
Of  loosing me
I want you to be jubilant
With all your heart
Oh my dear oh my dear

Oh my love oh my love
Why oh why donít leave me behind
I donít want that contingency
I donít want you to go
I will be all dissipated
Well you could just go ahead
And I will wait for you
Oh my love oh my love

Oh my dear oh my dear
This is our last goodbye
This is our farewell
I hope I come back soon
And donít cry
Wish me luck
Oh my dear oh my dear

Oh my love oh my love
I hope you come back too
I will wait for you
Bye my love
Farewell
Oh my love oh my love

Seasons have passed by
Years have passed by
She has been waiting
For her love to
Come back
But there is no sign
She sits by the translucent
Window
Mourning each and everyday
She has given her hope up
She doesnít talk to anyone
She feels inexpressive
And morbid
She has no life
She left her joy
Inside her dead heart
With that strenuous wound
Sheís trying to let time heal
All of her wounds
But finally she hears
A knock on the door
Knock knock
Then she says

Oh my love  oh my love
Is that you
I have been waiting for you
You donít know how long
It has been  
Please tell me its you
Oh my love oh my love

She opens the door
And sees a dazzling
Ravishing man
And it is him
The one shes waiting for

Oh my dear oh my dear
Yes it is me
How long it has been
The war was so gruesome
Some people died
You look pale and white
How have you been
I hope you havent been crying
Oh my dear oh my dear

Oh my love oh my love
I have been fine
All I wanted to was see you
Finally I got to see you
No one can separate us
Now I shall always be true to you
Since I cant find any better guy than you
Oh my love oh my love

Oh my dear oh my dear
You look so fragile
It looks like you lost some weight
What did I do to you
It seems so wrong
I am regretting it
But I had no choice
Oh my dear oh my dear

Oh my love oh my love
Its all right donít worry about it
Im happy that you came back in
My life
All I need is a long hug from you
I want you to touch me like
You always do
Lets get back to our normal lives
Oh my dear oh my dear
Finally she was happy that
She got to see her husband
Both of them had a happy ending
They eat and sleep together
And he is always there for her
He regretted his choice
Of not letting her come with him
But if she were to come
She would have died
And he didnít want the
Most wonderful women
Of his dreams to be gone
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priyanka
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since 06-15-2009
Posts 212
india


1 posted 10-05-2009 07:24 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

You just wow me with this one...
Its so beautiful
I always like happy endings
Hope I'll someday be there

LIKED IT A LOT
Assassin_of_Verse
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since 10-23-2007
Posts 330
that So Cal


2 posted 10-05-2009 09:02 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Seems strong in the beginning. As for the middle, some of it seemed to break away from the style it started out with:


"I donít want that contingency
I donít want you to go
I will be all dissipated"

compared with

"Since I cant find any better guy than you"

It seemed a little off...However, it was sweet at the end and enjoyed.

There is power in the pen.

maddorani
Member
since 11-18-2007
Posts 419
houston,tx


3 posted 10-06-2009 04:59 PM       View Profile for maddorani   Email maddorani   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maddorani

thankkkks
maddorani1991
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since 03-21-2013
Posts 20


4 posted 05-10-2014 04:24 PM       View Profile for maddorani1991   Email maddorani1991   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for maddorani1991

I am maddorani I forgot the password of my maddorani account and I revised this poem into a better format.
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