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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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0 posted 09-22-2009 05:55 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

On this slightly cold night,
I lay on the grass and gaze
wide-eyed at the starry sky.
It's so perfect-I almost hate it.

I feel the breeze on my face,
and I shudder at the sudden chill.
It goes throught my whole body,
even my heart thumped an extra beat.

As I look to my side,
all I see is grass.
Someone should be here,
I need someone to hold me.

While I close my eyes,
I imagine a face filled with compassion.
You're close to me,
The warmth of your breath is nice.

I imagine strong hands
to keep me safe from fear.
They're gentle and soft
as they brush against my neck.

But suddenly I open my eyes
in deep anticipation,
only to find that it was all fake.
You're my imaginary companion.

Will you find me soon?
Because I know you're out there.
You're out there looking for me,
so we can feel like one.

Some day we'll have another night just like this one.
Lying on the grass under the stars,
watching them dance in spontanious movements,
and just being together.

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

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Assassin_of_Verse
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1 posted 10-05-2009 09:18 PM       View Profile for Assassin_of_Verse   Email Assassin_of_Verse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Assassin_of_Verse

Cold. Breeze. Need. Warmth. Imagine. Anticipation. Feel. Together.

All these words and more brought a scenic hill to my mind. Good job!

There is power in the pen.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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2 posted 10-05-2009 09:26 PM       View Profile for Just.Another.Falling.Star   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Just.Another.Falling.Star's Home Page   View IP for Just.Another.Falling.Star

thank you!
i was actually picturing my back yard with the corn field right beside me...but almost the same!

julianna

everyone's normal [until you get to know them]

stargal
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3 posted 10-06-2009 12:24 AM       View Profile for stargal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stargal

I thought this was beautiful! Tragic, yet sweet. I loved how you paid such attention to details.  It made me imagine myself lying in the grass waiting for someone as well. I wish that I could be as detail oriented in my own work as you were in this.

Thank you for sharing. It was truly magical.

Stargal
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