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madelyn
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since 2009-09-03
Posts 172
Purgatory

0 posted 2009-09-21 05:33 AM


Please note~ This is about my best friend stabbing me in the back not about suicide.

What the hell
Did you do
To my heart?

It once beat freely
Free as a humming bird

It once was warm
Warm even in ice

It once loved everything
Loved even the face of hatred

It was beautiful
Even when it tried
To be ugly

It once glowed
Pink and cute

Now it’s dead
Black and blue and red
From where you punctured it

Now it is ugly
Even when it tries to be pretty

Now it is cold
Colder than ice

Now it’s stopped dead
Silence fills my chest

Why the hell
Would you do this
To some you loved?


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Ravagence
Member
since 2009-08-16
Posts 79

1 posted 2009-09-25 03:38 PM


Although I'm quite hot today, your beautiful, artistic, amazing piece has managed to send shivers down my back. No matter how many times I read it I get the same feeling, like the words are what now contains your anger. I love your work. I really want to read more like this.
priyanka
Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 216
india
2 posted 2009-09-26 05:39 PM


Nice one...
I liked the part
"What the hell did you do to my heart?"
"It was once warm
warm even in ice"

I liked it a lot...

This back stabbing makes it so hard to trust someone!

maddorani
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since 2007-11-18
Posts 423
houston,tx
3 posted 2011-03-11 06:08 PM


i liked it alot keep up the good work
XGarapanX
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since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435
Antarctica
4 posted 2011-03-22 02:52 PM


Love it.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·  "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

frencesmae
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since 2011-01-07
Posts 9
philippines
5 posted 2011-03-29 05:16 AM


good poem
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