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Chiyeung
New Member

since 2008-04-27

Posts 8
NY, USA

0 posted 2009-09-19 11:39 PM

He lies to you,
with the most sincere smile,
he takes you into his arms
and comforts you, with his words
he tells you- trust me.

You look into his eyes,
unable to see beyond the mask, a
veil which hides his emotions,
a struggle within him, a decision between
you and the stars of the Archer
but you believe
him, when he says- I am here for you.

He flatters you with
sweet talk, playing with your beliefs,
expressing feelings you believe in.
Compliments go a long way.
But inside him, he is lost. Struggling
within the maze of the night,
torn across the Way,
seeking what he already has,
struggling to let go.

During lonely nights in bed,
you think of him,
as he gazes upon the stars,
distant and far
making out the path of
arrows in which She dances,
You imagine him say
I miss you.

You muster the courage,
to tell him
you love him.
He smiles, but a smile that isn't his,
inside of him
his mind is distant
and the heart is further, fantasizing
about the Archer
but even so
he replies with what you believe;
I love you.
But he'll never mean you.

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2009-09-20 06:01 PM

Awwe! Sad poem but good. Very good. Though I was confused about the Archer thing. I thought you were meaning to constellations but that part doesn't make much sense to me.

Good write over all,
-Zach

Chiyeung
New Member

since 2008-04-27

Posts 8
NY, USA

2 posted 2009-09-20 08:26 PM

You are right! it is about a Sagittarius !

precious pearls
Member

since 2009-07-24

Posts 110
NJ; United States

3 posted 2009-09-28 09:28 PM

Wow... that was... wow. I mean it you described it with such beautiful metaphors and similies.... made me feel the actual pain in a way. Absolutley superb

Chiyeung
New Member

since 2008-04-27

Posts 8
NY, USA

4 posted 2009-09-28 09:47 PM

THANK YOU so much!

UNTAMEDelegance
Member

since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

5 posted 2009-09-30 12:29 PM

This is such a sad poem. Beautiful, but sad. You write in a truly eloquent and descriptive way that took me right there into the poem. Wonderful write. =^.^= May I ask what your inspiration was?
~UNTAMEDelegance

Chiyeung
New Member

since 2008-04-27

Posts 8
NY, USA

6 posted 2009-10-01 05:29 PM

Thank You so much.
From a personal experience, being torn between 2 people and realizing that I was merely substituting a person for another. Stupid, I know.

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

7 posted 2009-10-04 05:07 PM

absolutely true!
i know this from from personal experience too...
terrible things they do...
and believe me its not stupid
am I sounding ignorant when i say that?
just to say your not the only one...if that helps...i mean it too

[This message has been edited by priyanka (10-06-2009 11:44 AM).]

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

8 posted 2009-10-04 05:08 PM

nice poem ...conveys a lot of things...meaningful too

Thick_Goddness_973
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since 2009-10-25

Posts 13

9 posted 2009-10-25 04:42 PM

i love your poem it so sad but warm but it heart warming

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

10 posted 2009-10-27 04:20 AM

welcome to Passions. I really enjoyed this. it had an amazing story line to it.
Krysti

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