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He lies with a sincere smile.

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Chiyeung
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0 posted 09-19-2009 11:39 PM       View Profile for Chiyeung   Email Chiyeung   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chiyeung


He lies to you,
with the most sincere smile,
he takes you into his arms
and comforts you, with his words
he tells you- trust me.

You look into his eyes,
unable to see beyond the mask, a
veil which hides his emotions,
a struggle within him, a decision between
you and the stars of the      Archer      
but you believe
him, when he says- I am here for you.

He flatters you with
sweet talk, playing with your beliefs,
expressing feelings you believe in.
Compliments go a long way.
But inside him, he is lost. Struggling
within the maze of the night,
torn across the Way,
seeking what he already has,
struggling to let go.

During lonely nights in bed,
you think of him,
as he gazes upon the stars,
distant and far
making out the path of
arrows in which She dances,
You imagine him say
I miss you.

You muster the courage,
to tell him
you love him.
He smiles, but a smile that isn't his,
inside of him
his mind is distant
and the heart is further, fantasizing
about the Archer
but even so
he replies with what you believe;
I love you.
But he'll never mean you.
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Falling rain
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1 posted 09-20-2009 06:01 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Awwe! Sad poem but good. Very good. Though I was confused about the Archer thing. I thought you were meaning to constellations but that part doesn't make much sense to me.

Good write over all,
-Zach
Chiyeung
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2 posted 09-20-2009 08:26 PM       View Profile for Chiyeung   Email Chiyeung   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chiyeung

You are right! it is about a Sagittarius !
precious pearls
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3 posted 09-28-2009 09:28 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

Wow... that was... wow. I mean it you described it with such beautiful metaphors and similies.... made me feel the actual pain in a way. Absolutley superb
Chiyeung
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4 posted 09-28-2009 09:47 PM       View Profile for Chiyeung   Email Chiyeung   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chiyeung

THANK YOU so much!
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5 posted 09-30-2009 12:29 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

This is such a sad poem. Beautiful, but sad. You write in a truly eloquent and descriptive way that took me right there into the poem. Wonderful write. =^.^= May I ask what your inspiration was?          
                           ~UNTAMEDelegance
Chiyeung
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6 posted 10-01-2009 05:29 PM       View Profile for Chiyeung   Email Chiyeung   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Chiyeung

Thank You so much.
From a personal experience, being torn between 2 people and realizing that I was merely substituting a person for another. Stupid, I know.
priyanka
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7 posted 10-04-2009 05:07 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

absolutely true!
i know this from from personal experience too...
terrible things they do...
and believe me its not stupid
am I sounding ignorant when i say that?
just to say your not the only one...if that helps...i mean it too

[This message has been edited by priyanka (10-06-2009 11:44 AM).]

priyanka
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8 posted 10-04-2009 05:08 PM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

nice poem ...conveys a lot of things...meaningful too
Thick_Goddness_973
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9 posted 10-25-2009 04:42 PM       View Profile for Thick_Goddness_973   Email Thick_Goddness_973   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thick_Goddness_973

i love your poem  it so sad  but  warm  but it heart warming
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10 posted 10-27-2009 04:20 AM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

welcome to Passions. I really enjoyed this. it had an amazing story line to it.
Krysti
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