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Ravagence
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Your eyes,
take me back a million years,
To the time we talked.
Or so it seems.

Your eyes swallow me whole,
Seeking my differences,
turning them good.
Like stars, they glitter.

Shining forever,
hidden behind your hair.
Though that can't stop me from seeing them,
They shine in the night's air.

Empty air in front of us,
Is filled with your beauty.
Filling it like the smell of roses,
filling the garden.

You know how I feel,
you know what I want.
What I need.
What I am.

For Nuin-Tara, Best friend ever.
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1 posted 09-07-2009 02:29 PM       View Profile for Alison   Email Alison   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alison

What an icredibly beautiful tribute to a friend.

Alison
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i enjoyed this!
your detail was great but try using wider vocabulary it will help!
Keep writing!
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beautiful
 
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