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Just not today...

Don't ask peace of me
Just not today...
Don't ask hope of me
Just not today...
Don't seek no wisdom
from a broken man
If you can't move on,
I sure can.

Don't ask of me
To be a mountain
Not without her...
Don't ask of me
To carry the world
Not without her...
Don't seek strength
From a broken man,
When in my own strength
I ain't too sure.

I know I told you
Whenever you'd call
I'd be there to break your fall
To lend you a hand,
To help you stand,
To make you believe
That it's gonna be okay.
To wipe your tears,
Chase away your fears
But I just can't
Just not today
You're just gonna have to
Find your own way.
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You thought this through very well and I like how you constructed the poem.  Good job and welcome to PiP.

Alison
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wow the ending was sooo good def. my favorite part. the beginning didnt flow as nice i thought but very nice story behind this. »Great write
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