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Falling rain
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Wandering aimless
Down my old ways
another bottle empty
As I hum while I sway

I see the chaos
That bubble inside
But jolly I remain
The feelings I try and hide  

Dancing a drunken dance
Under the pale light
Keeping under control
I'm such a terrible sight

I look into shop windows
And wonder who's looking back
The monster's drenched in tears
Shrouded in shadow's black

Another swig finding
himself at the bottles end
He looks back in pain
Looking at his only friend..
© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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DUDE. This one is BY FAR your greatest work thus far. loved it man. ive  been there alot before man.

and for some reason, i was thinking of the first pirates movie

"why is all the rum gone?" lol

~ you cant run from yourself ~

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zach, i almost can't believe you wrote this. its so utterly amazing, i can hardly say how much. great job with everything in it.
library

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

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Fantastic write Zach.

It's going in my library

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Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
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4 posted 08-30-2009 09:19 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Lol! I love that movie! "But why the rum?!"

But thanks Julianna, Bryan, and Emily. Glad you liked it.

-Zach
 
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