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Elias Nevermore
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0 posted 08-27-2009 03:29 PM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elias Nevermore

Silence. Then four loud shots.
The pieces are in place.

Hours pass. The scene is vacant.
The bodies lay dormant.

A car speeds down the highway.
The sunset is approaching.

Laughter. They are almost there.
They are hidden in fog.

Waves crash. The pier is in sight.
Four men hit the ground.

Five minutes is all he needs.
He drives off lighter.

Headline. "Four Men Found Dead".
They were the first to fall.

A man sees the paper and smirks.
They will not be the last.


"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

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1 posted 09-11-2009 11:55 PM       View Profile for XxForever.BrokenxX   Email XxForever.BrokenxX   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for XxForever.BrokenxX

A bit dark for teen, but otherwise I liked it. Especially the first two lines. Nice write.


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Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
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2 posted 09-12-2009 02:03 PM       View Profile for hunnie_girl   Email hunnie_girl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for hunnie_girl

heavy poem you have here enjoyed
Krysti
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Yeah, sounds like another plot I'd love to hear about. And wow:

"Five minutes is all he needs.
He drives off lighter."

There is power in the pen.

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