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XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
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Neverland

0 posted 2009-08-22 03:27 PM




Stuck behind the glass,
screaming for any escape,
I can feel the tears running low.
I don't want to pretend again,
but I keep running in circles,
searching over and over for a way out.
Searching for a reason that will keep you.

I want to pretend a happy ending,
one where everything smiles.
But I can't live in my head forever,
My heart knows there's no stopping you.

So what do you do when autumn falls?
You can't run from winter.
{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

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freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12
Posts 704
CA, USA
1 posted 2009-08-23 12:55 PM


I really like this! You ended the poem so well, too.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
Posts 891
Neverland
2 posted 2009-08-23 01:12 AM


Thanks, took me a while to think of how to word the ending so I'm glad you like it.


12:12, make a wish..


{~~*~~}

stacylynn418
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since 2009-03-06
Posts 40
new york
3 posted 2009-08-23 01:30 AM


i think that this is a great poem. and i agree, you ended it really well.

"But I can't live in my head forever,
My heart knows there's no stopping you."
i love that part the most

brneyedgrly
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since 2009-06-08
Posts 1125
nowhere and everywhere
4 posted 2009-08-23 10:46 AM



Loved your poem...the last two lines are awesome!

Good job  

.

flesh, blood, bone, love...twisted
~ L. Hall

XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
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Neverland
5 posted 2009-08-24 03:03 PM


Thank you. I'm glad to hear it


{~~*~~}

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

Assassin_of_Verse
Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal
6 posted 2009-08-25 12:17 PM


"I want to pretend a happy ending,
one where everything smiles."

God knows how many times I've tried something like that.
Great poem!

There is power in the pen.

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