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Hand me the silk thread
That's lying on the floor
The damages are fatal
My heart's been through another war

Was it really worth it?
To say I loved and lost
Then to never love at all?
Despite what it cost

I sharpen the needle
And puncture the beating flesh
Opening and cleanse the wound
Of the emotions tangled in a mesh

I retrace over the scars
From a time long ago  
The beating bruises try to heal
And forget all its past woes

I tie the knot as it beats
The heart lost within its soul
What a fragile thing is it now
A fragment of what once was whole

My heart is damaged
But in time we hope it'll heal
Regain its strength again
And learn, once again, how to feel



(The title sorta doesn't make much sense. But it sounded nice for the poem and I like it. This poem was really from the heart.. Though the fifth stanza I was really debating on leaving it in.I might take it out later. Hope you enjoyed it.)

[This message has been edited by Falling rain (08-23-2009 10:30 AM).]

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1 posted 08-22-2009 06:51 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

"My heart is forever damaged
But in time we hope it'll heal
Regain its strength again
And learn, once again, how to feel :


try and find another word for  "forever" damaged because then it can't heal

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2 posted 08-23-2009 12:58 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

This is really awesome, Zach! I love it, though I don't care for the second stanza, I'd take it out, though that's just my opinion.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

stacylynn418
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3 posted 08-23-2009 01:20 AM       View Profile for stacylynn418   Email stacylynn418   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stacylynn418

very well written, and i liked it a lot :]
id say leave the fifth stanza in.

~stacy
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4 posted 08-23-2009 11:17 PM       View Profile for UNTAMEDelegance   Email UNTAMEDelegance   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for UNTAMEDelegance

This is beautiful and the imagery and metaphors are wonderfully strung throughout the poem. This is one of my favorites of yours that I've read.=^.^= Also, I loved the fifth stanza. I'm glad that it's there.
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