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Death on The Streets

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Elias Nevermore
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0 posted 08-22-2009 03:44 AM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Elias Nevermore

Blood, splattered on the the streets,
while pigs gorge themselves on treats.
The rats scavenge for something to eat
until they can no longer move their feet.

Damn these pigs, these filthy swine,
who take pleasure in the loss of lives.
They persecute the mice who always try
to find meager meals to keep them alive.

Thousands of mice lay tired, unable to breathe
as a result of the swines' great greed.
This hunger is the fruit born of our seeds,
for we gave them power, and their right to feed.

As every last drop of food is consumed,
more mice will starve, for death is the mood
in a society where leeches always rule,
and the weak will always be there food.


"Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing,
Doubting, dreaming dreams no mortals ever dared to dream before;" -Edgar All

[This message has been edited by Elias Nevermore (08-22-2009 05:40 PM).]

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1 posted 08-22-2009 10:19 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Your work has always interested me. And this caught my eye. I really liked this. (and going to put it in my library)

But "dead" and "greed" don't rhyme. Unless I'm pronouncing it wrong. I think you meant "weak" instead of "week" too.

-Zach
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Thanx zach for pointing out the errors. I wrote the poem in a rush last night, so I overlooked some of the mistakes that you noticed. So I just fixed them right now.

I'm glad that you liked the poem.
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