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Clockwork_Orange
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0 posted 08-21-2009 05:33 PM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange


judgement has been passed
the days are growing cold
somehow you still seem to think
that the world owes you smoke
but the judgement has been passed
incarceration has repeat itself
the chains hold you back, hold you down
but your memories wont melt
yes the judgment has been passed
on this sad day of mourn
cold and feeble in the distance
the rain begins to pour

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freeand2sexy
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1 posted 08-23-2009 12:51 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

I thought this was interesting, though I think you should change,

"incarceration has repeat itself"

to

incarceration repeats itself

I always enjoy reading your poems! Keep up the writing!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

stacylynn418
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2 posted 08-23-2009 01:22 AM       View Profile for stacylynn418   Email stacylynn418   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for stacylynn418

i really enjoyed reading this. great job :]
Elias Nevermore
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3 posted 08-25-2009 12:37 AM       View Profile for Elias Nevermore   Email Elias Nevermore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elias Nevermore

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. It is a great work, and I look forward to your next poem.
precious pearls
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4 posted 08-25-2009 03:47 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

The poem just speaks to me... like all your writing does....
But that aside, i liked it cuz it has a certain intensity to it, I can't explain how, but for me, it does
I really look forward to your next poem...
 
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