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Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN


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i was sitting in the middle of a thunderstorm last week in a little place called space camp, alaska. lol (not really alaska) and i wrote a poem when i came inside.


crimson streaks of deep burgandy
are lighting up the sky
the melodic falling of the heavens
shows the world can truly cry

and maybe, somewhere in the future
ill remember being here
lost inside thoughts
of dry spots and raindrops
with the worries and the fears


the rhythmic pounding of the rain
has me caught up in a trip
of being as far away as possible
from this terminal of quit

a little bit of whiskey
runs through my veins
and maybe there right
maybe im to blame
as i i sit all alone
with my bottle in the rain

ill drink the last drop
and then ill fall asleep
to the sound of the rain
enveloping me.
© Copyright 2009 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
stacylynn418
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since 03-06-2009
Posts 40
new york


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this is great. i really enjoyed reading it :]
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Dude this is my favorite of yours, no doubt. I really like it. I really liked the first few stanza's.
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