that So Cal
Wow. Ur poem was fun to read, but very confusing. Not confusing as in bad, but hard to understand.
First of all, i wasn't sure bout the 2nd line in the first stanza: "search not you after words of coal?" the following lines make it sound like the ppl ur refering to do nothing but say negative things (or neglect to say positive things). But doesn't coal usually mean something dirty, or even darkened? Which would usually make "search not you after words of coal?" sound like the "critic" are only praising.
The 2nd stanza was pretty clear to me. I also liked ur choice of words and rhyme.
However, the 3rd stanza left me a bit confused. Hmm, wat is the speaker asking for? A chance at critique? That would mean that the first two stanzas could be refering to shallow (or horrible) critics who do nothing for new or yet-to-be recognized writers. Or is the speaker looking for critics that do more than just praise, maybe uncomfortable with the lack of an honest critique?
Haha, this one REALy made me think. I'm dying to know the answer...But don't actually tell me. Lol, I guess it'd diminsh the fun of the poem (for me).
There is power in the pen.