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What's on my Face

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0 posted 08-16-2009 02:28 PM       View Profile for Ravagence   Email Ravagence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravagence

My Original Poem:

What's on my face

Creeping along my face,
In the dark midnight sky,
I undo my jacket rimmed with lace,
And I wonder what's on my face.

Cold legs burning dead holes through my skin,
Ripping me apart with it's fangs.
I shudder suddenly with a puff of steam,
And I wonder what's on my face.

Muttering harshly to myself,
'Nonsense, that's all it is',
I wonder if this is truly real,
For I seem to have something on my face.

::NOTE::

In this poem, the speaker has something on him. He doesn't know what it is, and it's defiantly inflicting pain on him, but he still lets it do it to him. I'm trying to put a point out there that we teens do things that hurt us, but we don't stop it. Why we do this, no-one truly knows.
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1 posted 08-16-2009 08:12 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Your poem makes more sense with your note. It was a good poem. Welcome to Pip!!

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2 posted 08-17-2009 09:09 AM       View Profile for Ravagence   Email Ravagence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ravagence

Thanks, It's kind of inconspicuous without you knowing what's behind it.
 
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