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XxForever.BrokenxX
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0 posted 2009-08-11 12:33 PM



The stars fell from the sky last night,
taking down the night.
Don't forget,
they need to be remembered.

The moon burst into flames last night,
burning till it fell.
Remember it's beauty.
Don't forget it's grace.

The sun forgot to shine today,
I guess it felt alone.
But it took everything with it,
and now the world is colder.

{~~*~~}


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I just felt like writing.
Hope you like it.

Lacrimosa Dies Illa
[Oh that tearful day]
    {~~*~~}

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Leanne <3
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since 2007-08-25
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1 posted 2009-08-13 01:01 AM


This poem has a really nice feel about it.
it made me look outside and see how sunny it is
i might go for a walk

Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
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Stafford England
2 posted 2009-08-29 02:19 AM


I loved this one, Emily.

And all the roads that I've been strolling down... now I've found they all seem to be marooned. So profoundly doomed.

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Member Rara Avis
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3 posted 2009-08-29 02:46 PM


I like this poem because it reminds us to not take the beauty and wonder that the sky holds for granted.

I like how you "just feel like writing" and write.

Alison

Earl Brinkman
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Osaka, Japan
4 posted 2010-03-06 07:40 AM


I liked the structure of this piece.  It flowed well.
StarlitMind
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since 2010-03-17
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New England
5 posted 2010-03-17 10:15 PM


I was just about to go out star gazing when I read this... and well, thanks to you I'm going to see the night sky in a fresh beauty. Much appreciated.
MadMarcus
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Sweden, Solna
6 posted 2010-03-18 10:09 AM


Love it! It´s wonderful <3
XxForever.BrokenxX
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7 posted 2010-03-18 09:35 PM


Thank you


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EmilyTheStrange
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