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Astrophial
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since 2009-08-10
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0 posted 2009-08-10 12:33 PM


Well, what the heck.
I'm head over heels,
I'm falling again.

I can't forget what it felt like.
Everything that happened.
I liked it too much,
when your arms were around me.
I liked it too much,
those moments together.
I liked it too much,
Letting it all out.
But it hurts too much,
to fall in love all over again.


Comments totally appreciated, don't be afraid to be harsh.


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crosscountry83
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since 2009-07-30
Posts 345

1 posted 2009-08-10 03:32 PM


Good job, I like it, the tone is set up expertly.  Maybe adding a couple lines at the end with some hope in them?  Hang in there

Rileigh

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