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Falling again . . .

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Astrophial
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0 posted 08-10-2009 12:33 AM       View Profile for Astrophial   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Astrophial

Well, what the heck.
I'm head over heels,
I'm falling again.

I can't forget what it felt like.
Everything that happened.
I liked it too much,
when your arms were around me.
I liked it too much,
those moments together.
I liked it too much,
Letting it all out.
But it hurts too much,
to fall in love all over again.


Comments totally appreciated, don't be afraid to be harsh.

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crosscountry83
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1 posted 08-10-2009 03:32 PM       View Profile for crosscountry83   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for crosscountry83

Good job, I like it, the tone is set up expertly.  Maybe adding a couple lines at the end with some hope in them?  Hang in there

Rileigh
 
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