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I can remember a time
Where we'd spent late out at night
Under the bright shining stars
Watching fireflies dance out of sight

Holding on to those memories
Keeps me hanging on till tomorrow
But no matter how much I wish it away
My heart is only filled with sorrow

I reminisce moments spent together
And placed them in a ribbon box
Tuck it into the shadows
And hope my fragile heart will lock  

I smile at the thought of us
On how much we promised to be together
But times have changed and its all gone
Although it hasn't changed for the better

I hope in time my heart will heal
To find happiness and peace at mind
Finally come to my senses
And leave you and the past behind
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The poem didn't flow very well at all. The poem took a lot to write. So enjoy?
© Copyright 2009 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-03-2009 07:19 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

The first and second stanza made me cry because The first one reminds me of times spent with my mom and the second one knowing I can never do these things with her again.

I loved this poem its amazing

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2 posted 08-04-2009 07:06 AM       View Profile for Suncleaver   Email Suncleaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suncleaver

Nicely done, Zach.

Everyone has memories like these.

One can never lock one's heart though. I believe that we must take the bitter with the sweet at the end of the rainbow.

And everything's a learning curve. As long as you're not bled to the point where all becomes scar tissue, then you will heal, and become stronger.
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I thought the flow wasn't too bad.  Pretty good in fact, but that's just me.  I did enjoy it.

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