It's difficult to be different

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Teen Poetry #9

It's difficult to be different

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

0 posted 2009-07-31 12:50 PM

I just wrote this, in like 15 min, so it isn't very good, and definitly not my best. Critiques are still welcome, but I don't plan on revising this, I already have too many poems to revise.

It's difficult to be different,
In a world that is clichéd,
With its roses
Its hearts
Even the tear drops we've made,

With the loneliness,
That "no one" understands,
And the obstacles
That leave us
On our feet and hands.
It has never changed.

It seems almost impossible
To be an original,
In a world that is clichéd,
With its moon
And stars
We are all, our own, yet the same,

With the pain and doubts,
And the ignorance
Of walking down
The same old route,
With the same mistakes.
We all must fall, one day.

It's difficult to be different,
In a world that is clichéd,
With its lost souls,
Its broken dreams,
It seems, all the same to me.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

1 posted 2009-07-31 03:11 PM

Good job, I like it. I can almost see a pattern in the way you used your words. Gave it a beat with out using meter. Maybe if you brought out the pattern to make it more noticable... I don't know...
Overall, good job!

Rileigh

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