navwin » Main Forums » Teen Poetry #9 » Watching Through a Scope
Teen Poetry #9
Post A Reply Post New Topic Watching Through a Scope Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360
New Orleans

0 posted 2009-07-30 08:27 AM


The man next to me, holds a picture of his wife and cries.

I crouch lower for the one who moves, dies.

I stare into my scope at the ridge before me.

The dawn breaks to light the enemy for all to see.

They crawl, here and there. There is no wind.

As I let go of my breath, I say a prayer for the man's death.

My finger presses against the trigger, for a bullet to send.

As I hear the shot go off, the world stands still.

Pink Mist filling the sky. A shot of skill.

Those left are next. One shot. One kill.

We pick them off, I let a man run before I fired.

Does he not know? Run from a sniper you'll only die tired.

The man next to me must have got what he desired. For he went home that day, a feat to be admired.

If not for the fact he lay in a casket. I do not cry.

There are many more lives for me to take. Even if only for my families sake.

I do not care for death, nor do I wish for suffering. Yet this war has only started and has much more to bring.

A priest once asked me, how can I be so cold?

I answered as truthfully as I knew how.

"A wise man once said to me:You want to stay alive? Then do as your told! Keep your head down, always be bold. You're the salesman, they the customer. Now get these bullets sold."

Semper Fi

-LostPoet

© Copyright 2009 Zachariah Gavia-Peyton - All Rights Reserved
crosscountry83
Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345

1 posted 2009-07-30 04:00 PM


Wow this is fabulous poetry. It's very descriptive and I pretty much know what's going on during the whole poem.  I wonder what it would feel like to be in that situation.
Leanne <3
Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia
2 posted 2009-08-06 01:31 AM


heaps of war poems normally begin to sound the same because they all have a similar tone, but i really liked how u wrote it from a different perspective.  In some ways a more honest perception of war. kill or be killed.

great job
-Lee

N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 360
New Orleans
3 posted 2009-08-07 02:55 AM


Thank you.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." Oscar Wilde

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Main Forums » Teen Poetry #9 » Watching Through a Scope

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary