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Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
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Canada

0 posted 2009-07-27 06:35 PM


Hello, I've been gone for quite some time now. And only recently have I been able to come up with something to write. I think its okay, but I'd like to know what you think, thanks.

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loneliness Pictures, Images and Photos

Seasons change four times a year.
The leaves fall to the ground,
the snow begins to melt,
and the colors come to life.

It's easy to talk about the season's,
and how the colors fade with ease.
There's no problems in the way,
nothing to make it stop.

People have seasons too.
Ours aren't as beautiful.
Our changes aren't as graceful,
and the colors are not so pretty.

Someone breaks down,
and falls to their knees.
Everything they've ever experienced,
is escaping through the tears that fall from their eyes.

We are only human.
You can't expect us to be perfect.
We all have different seasons,
will you accept mine?

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

© Copyright 2009 Julianna - All Rights Reserved
Falling rain
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1 posted 2009-07-27 08:15 PM


I liked the message. It was different. Different is good. Keep writing. And I like the picture.
Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
Posts 422
Canada
2 posted 2009-07-27 08:18 PM


thanks, i just wish the picture wouldn't have shown up so big, its over-powering.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
3 posted 2009-07-28 01:15 AM


this was well written and an interesting read. i cant wait to see more from you. its an honor to read your words.
Talh1n0vl3v1tat10n
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since 2009-07-28
Posts 6

4 posted 2009-07-29 10:38 PM


very nice i do like the comparisons
N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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since 2009-07-30
Posts 360
New Orleans
5 posted 2009-07-30 05:27 AM


The grace of your writing
Is only to be compared to
That of the wind.

To compare the wind to that of scripture, that is the task.


Beautifully captured.

-LostPoet

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
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Canada
6 posted 2009-07-30 11:02 AM


thanks so much both Talh1n0vl3v1tat10n and Lost Poet.
i'm not worthy of the words you spoke, Lost Poet, but thank you.

julianna

.:.:~]you clicked your heals and wished for me[~:.:.

*Alli4000*
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7 posted 2009-08-09 10:31 AM


That was a very good read! It's good to have you back here.

~Alli~

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