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I Made It

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precious pearls
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0 posted 07-25-2009 09:33 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for precious pearls

I Made It!

They didnít think I could make it
They thought I was broken
But Iím standing here proud and strong
And for once, I donít need to belong

I used to cry all the time
Now Iím the one who shines
People still talk
But I know I still rock

I didnít know how to deal before
But since Iíve gone through that
I know Jesus really is my savior
I know now it doesnít matter whether Iím skinny or fat
I know Iím strong and can make it through whatever
I now know that Iím better

I know that I can make it through the bad
Whatever obstacle comes my way
To other peopleís dismay
I stand here with God as my comrade

I know Iím beautiful
I know that my family
Will remain true and loyal
Whether Iím sad or happy


I know that God will help me fight my demons
I know that my heart is my strongest weapon

I feel triumphant
Because I made it
Iím nobodyís twit
Because Iíve arrived

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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arabesque
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1 posted 07-26-2009 05:17 PM       View Profile for arabesque   Email arabesque   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for arabesque

It's great to be confident in yourself (:  I must say, I like how your stanzas aren't all the same...they all just sort of melt into each other.  Yea, that made no sense but I hope you get what I'm saying.  Great poem (:

Forever,
Arabesque<3

precious pearls
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2 posted 07-26-2009 08:42 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

Thanks I appreciate that and the fact that you were the first to comment!!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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3 posted 07-27-2009 02:25 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I don't know if I've been stuck in a pattern when writing but the different stanza's just bugged me a little. But that's prolly just me. I liked the over all message in the poem. Just be careful too much confidence could rub off as arrogance or narcissistic. Good write though.
Clockwork_Orange
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4 posted 07-28-2009 01:18 AM       View Profile for Clockwork_Orange   Email Clockwork_Orange   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Clockwork_Orange's Home Page   View IP for Clockwork_Orange

very strong emotion and feeling inside the words, yet i feel that some parts are just a bit forced. an exceptionally interesting read, and i hope to see more posts soon.

~ you cant run from yourself ~

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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this was really encouraging. i like the flow of words and how it blended together. it was very nicely done.
but yeah, just be careful that too much self-confidence doesn't come off as pride.
over all it was wonderful!

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julianna

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