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precious pearls
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0 posted 2009-07-24 10:10 PM


A Daughter’s Wish

How should you feel about a man
Who didn’t want to have anything to do with you?
When can you confront a man
That was never responsible and didn’t love you, too.

What could you say to a man
When you knew he never wanted you?
What would you talk about to a man
When he was the issue?

Too many tears shed over this worthless man
Is what some people say
You know he’s a coward who ran
From his problems that day

Is he decent?
You wonder
Is he sorry?
You wonder

Your other side-
Do they know you’re alive?
You asked the silence
As you cried
Does it bother his conscience?
You ask the night
Or has the way to the goodness of his soul
The way to the light
Gone out too?
Is his heart the same as coal?

Why did he leave me?
You scream inside
Don’t let him break you down that easy
Your heart replied
And that’s when you realize
That you’re always going to want to know
Why he didn’t stay and watch you grow.

But now you have reached the conclusion
That he is the one who is broken
Not you
And as you realize this breakthrough
You still cannot help but wish
That you knew him too.


Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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1 posted 2009-07-24 11:44 PM


Definitely, a pearl of work, here, m'dear.

You definitely had a hard trail to travel,
yet, here you are.
Unbroken of spirit, for it soars;
unbroken of words, which now roar.

Welcome to Passions!

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2 posted 2009-07-25 09:57 AM


This was very good. A lot of a emotion in this and it was really heartfelt. Keep it up. Can't wait to see what else you come up with.

-Zach

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3 posted 2009-07-30 01:59 PM


I'm a lil late, but...

Welcome to Pip!!!!

Nice poem!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

crosscountry83
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4 posted 2009-07-30 03:13 PM


I liked it a lot.  Your new? I am too.  I really like how you explain how you feel in a way that is calming yet questioning and flows exceptionally. Keep it up!
precious pearls
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5 posted 2009-08-19 03:14 PM


Thanks guys!!! I've been really busy, so I haven't been able to post anything or comment, but I appreciate the welcomes and comments!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

madelyn
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6 posted 2009-09-04 06:25 AM


I have felt those feelings o' so many times... but realization is the first step...
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7 posted 2009-09-10 08:31 PM


can relate to this well. great first post
Krysti

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8 posted 2009-09-12 01:35 AM


I like your style.

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