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freeand2sexy
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This is still a work in progress, but let me know what you think of it so far. Also, if anyone has any ideas for a better title, let me know.


Memories migrate into my thoughts
And I'm a child once again,
Smelling sliced lemons, doused in salt
There are no boundaries,
Even with stinging chapped lips
I still sucked out the sour excitement,
Of each lemon.

I'm skipping on slippery grass,
Feeling rain drops scamper down
My smooth skin.
Moms on the edge,
Afraid I'll trip and hit my head.
She panics yet again,
Though I hardly notice her fear.
Children can be careless.

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

© Copyright 2009 Christine Juarez - All Rights Reserved
Leanne <3
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since 08-25-2007
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1 posted 07-09-2009 02:23 AM       View Profile for Leanne <3   Email Leanne <3   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Leanne <3

i really like this so far.
its such a familiar feeling when thinking back to your past.
i think this would be better if it were a little longer, but i love what you've already written
-Lee
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