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the_inner_me11
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0 posted 06-20-2009 11:04 PM       View Profile for the_inner_me11   Email the_inner_me11   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_inner_me11

Need help with the title. Suggestions please.


Standing still and looking on,
I see the sight i feared upon.
Silently searching,
But no words are perching,
Upon my toungue,
Feeling my body collapse like a lung.
Tired and alone,
I step away and grope for my phone.
I know someone will be there,
But where,
Oh where am i?
Crawling away to lie,
Secluded and scared to die.
Crying and hurting,
Why are you always flirting,
Playing with my emotions,
Your love like somber potions.
Breaking apart,
With no where to dart.
I think I'll hide,
Where no one can tell how badly you've hurt me inside.
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meganne_77
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since 04-15-2009
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1 posted 06-24-2009 08:45 PM       View Profile for meganne_77   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for meganne_77

i really liked this poem. i liked the rhythm n rhyme and the meaning. Good luck giving it a title, because idk?

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the_inner_me11
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2 posted 06-28-2009 05:35 PM       View Profile for the_inner_me11   Email the_inner_me11   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_inner_me11

Thank you. Im happy to hear some feedback.
priyanka
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3 posted 07-03-2009 08:03 AM       View Profile for priyanka   Email priyanka   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for priyanka

nice poem... there is a perfect flow... liked it... and there is somr real meaning in there... you project your emotions very well...
Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk
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4 posted 07-10-2009 09:36 PM       View Profile for Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk   Email Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Peanutbuttercookies'nmilk

I think a nice poem title is How You Hurt Me.

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