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kindredspirit
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0 posted 06-20-2009 11:28 AM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for kindredspirit

i've heard the story of forever
a circle without end
beneath the shadows in his smile
and lovers playing pretend

i've told the story of forever
through eyes that turn astray
and hands that seek forgiveness
while pushing you away

you mocked our love a fairy tale
wrote me down to dust
tore away the hidden veil
exposed translucent lust

staring through a prism
that reveals the face of light
our bond means nothing more
then the words you bled that night.
© Copyright 2009 Kara Fohner - All Rights Reserved
meganne_77
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1 posted 06-20-2009 05:12 PM       View Profile for meganne_77   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for meganne_77

good job. i loved the rhythm and the flow.

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kindredspirit
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2 posted 06-21-2009 12:03 AM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

Thankyou I appreciate the feedback.
Earl Robertson
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3 posted 06-21-2009 05:27 PM       View Profile for Earl Robertson   Email Earl Robertson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Robertson

Excellent flow, I lost myself in the sheer rhythm of you're words! Also I love the imagery of shadow's in smiles...   

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cool piece! ^^
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good write
 
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