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~frustrated writer~
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0 posted 06-18-2009 11:05 PM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~


you ain't no Harry Potter who lives in magical land;
yet everything you do to me is magic in a wand.
you ain't no Peter Pan who can fly;
yet when I'm with you i feel like I'm in the sky.
you ain't no Edgar Allan Poe who writes so lovely;
yet you've written me a nice story.
you ain't no Conan Doyle who investigates mysterious cases;
yet you've found an evidence why my heart beats.
you ain't no clown who does funny things;
yet you always make me laugh and sing.
you ain't no compass which points the right direction;
yet you've found the right way to my heart with no connection.
you ain't no Einstein who has a brilliantmind;
yet you've got an idea that's one of a kind.
you ain't no Descartes, Father of Mathematics;
yet you're able to add a smile and subtract my worries.
you ain't no Atlas who put the world in his hands;
yet you've given me the moon and the stars.
you ain't no Rizal who sacrificed a lot;
yet you're my superhero with no doubt.
you ain't no David Cook's masterpiece;
yet you're the sweetest song i wanna memorize.
you ain't no Brad Pitt who's so handsome and so hot
yet you're everything I've got.
you ain't no Macintosh nor Bill Gates;
not a Holy one nor one of the Saints
but you're only a guy, just an ordinary guy who stole my heart.

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1 posted 06-19-2009 12:42 PM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

I like this. But work on your rhyming. "land" and "wand" don't rhyme. lol. Keep writing though.

-Zach
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2 posted 06-19-2009 01:30 PM       View Profile for moonbeam   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonbeam

Zach, my man, it's slant rhyme, which given the remainder of the poem which has no pretensions at a strict metrical pattern, I think is perfectly acceptable.  We don't have to rhyme perfectly all the time yanno.

Not a bad poem at all; fun!
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3 posted 06-19-2009 09:06 PM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~

mr. fallingrain, it's a rhyme.. try to pronounce it clearly.. :p
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4 posted 06-20-2009 01:29 AM       View Profile for freeand2sexy   Email freeand2sexy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit freeand2sexy's Home Page   View IP for freeand2sexy

It's called eye rhyme, it's based on spelling and not on sound.

I really enjoyed the poem!

The hardest part about writing poetry,
is trying not to write like everyone else.

~frustrated writer~
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5 posted 06-20-2009 06:07 AM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~

really? owh.. thanks for the compliment ^_^
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6 posted 07-24-2009 09:56 PM       View Profile for precious pearls   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for precious pearls

I particularly liked this poem because it showed the real you. It's like, most people try to use proper language and stuff when they write... but you wrote how you talk... and i feel it showed the sincerity and true nature of you as a person... exceptional job!!!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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7 posted 07-26-2009 05:09 PM       View Profile for arabesque   Email arabesque   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for arabesque

Aww this is so sweet.  I loved it!  (:

Forever,
Arabesque<3

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8 posted 08-09-2009 10:20 PM       View Profile for *Alli4000*   Email *Alli4000*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Alli4000*

I really liked this poem; the guy sounds like one amazing person!

~Alli~
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9 posted 09-01-2009 03:18 AM       View Profile for ~frustrated writer~   Email ~frustrated writer~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~frustrated writer~

precious pearls
arabesque
*Alli4000*

thank you so much for your comments! ^^
appreciated much **,
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