you ain't no Harry Potter who lives in magical land; yet everything you do to me is magic in a wand. you ain't no Peter Pan who can fly; yet when I'm with you i feel like I'm in the sky. you ain't no Edgar Allan Poe who writes so lovely; yet you've written me a nice story. you ain't no Conan Doyle who investigates mysterious cases; yet you've found an evidence why my heart beats. you ain't no clown who does funny things; yet you always make me laugh and sing. you ain't no compass which points the right direction; yet you've found the right way to my heart with no connection. you ain't no Einstein who has a brilliantmind; yet you've got an idea that's one of a kind. you ain't no Descartes, Father of Mathematics; yet you're able to add a smile and subtract my worries. you ain't no Atlas who put the world in his hands; yet you've given me the moon and the stars. you ain't no Rizal who sacrificed a lot; yet you're my superhero with no doubt. you ain't no David Cook's masterpiece; yet you're the sweetest song i wanna memorize. you ain't no Brad Pitt who's so handsome and so hot yet you're everything I've got. you ain't no Macintosh nor Bill Gates; not a Holy one nor one of the Saints but you're only a guy, just an ordinary guy who stole my heart.
Zach, my man, it's slant rhyme, which given the remainder of the poem which has no pretensions at a strict metrical pattern, I think is perfectly acceptable. We don't have to rhyme perfectly all the time yanno.
Not a bad poem at all; fun!
I particularly liked this poem because it showed the real you. It's like, most people try to use proper language and stuff when they write... but you wrote how you talk... and i feel it showed the sincerity and true nature of you as a person... exceptional job!!!
Always, Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)