that So Cal
The title made me smile at first, but reading on, ur poem made me think a little (not too much, its rice after all...)
Haha, I wonder if i should stop eating so much rice. XD
But really, I loved ur examples. Though common (maybe even cliche), they work well and keep a constant rythym. That was something I enjoyed even more. The rythym was pretty smooth, kinda soothing.
I liked ur end as well. The repetition along with the subtle removal of a line really seemed to change the meaning overall. Left me with a positive feeling.
Thanks for ur interesting look on rice! XD
There is power in the pen.