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Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2009-05-25 11:28 AM

The raindrops fall lightly
Across the broken stones
As I sit within the storm
I tell myself "I'm not alone"

As I sob, quiet as the rain
I feel every feeling I hid
Inside a ribbon box long ago
The ones my mind forbid

I whisper to myself
That someday I'll be alright
But my big dreams like that
Don't come in sight

I wish upon every star
Begging God to make me okay
I'll trade anything right now
To make me see that way

The clouds roll on
But the rain still falls
I'm caught within myself
The one with a hopeless call

To save me from myself..

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JenniferMaxwell

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since 2006-09-14

Posts 2423

1 posted 2009-05-25 11:34 AM

After the storm, the rainbow.

Very poignant, evocative and well written!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2009-05-26 08:42 AM

@WOW.. so good i'm speachless..

freeand2sexy
Senior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 704
CA, USA

3 posted 2009-05-27 07:57 PM

Love this, Zach!!!

The tips of my fingers
Start to bleed the thoughts
That overwhelm me

nehematala
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since 2009-05-21

Posts 129

4 posted 2009-05-29 01:55 PM

Wow!!!!

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2009-05-31 09:10 AM

Thanks for the comments everyone!

"Who are you to judge the life I live? I know I'm not perfect" - Bob Marley

kindredspirit
Member

since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

6 posted 2009-06-08 04:26 PM

the ending climax is excellent, and the emotions and message this poem conveys are very powerful. i like it alot!

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

7 posted 2009-06-09 02:22 AM

i really loved the poem
the mood matched the setting perfectly
great work.

priyanka
Member

since 2009-06-15

Posts 216
india

8 posted 2009-06-15 06:00 AM

Sometimes i feel like a drop in the ocean
lost i am... to never be found...
you put it out so beautifully...
nice 2 know that someone out there feels the same way i do...

you put it so well...pain and suffering the storm signifies thats what your enclosed in... and then the sullen silence- sob u say..
i love it...

something meaningful
Junior Member

since 2009-07-17

Posts 12
Wisconsin, USA

9 posted 2009-07-17 08:46 PM

you are an amazing writer! i love it! it just makes so much sense to me.

precious pearls
Member

since 2009-07-24

Posts 110
NJ; United States

10 posted 2009-07-24 09:46 PM

I hav 2 say it, you should get your stuff PUBLISHED!! I mean it was just so... honest. Breathtakingly honest! You have a gift... your writing touches the soul, and makes you think a different perspective on life. I know it did that for me! Great job!

Always,
Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

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