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Falling rain
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The raindrops fall lightly
Across the broken stones
As I sit within the storm
I tell myself "I'm not alone"

As I sob, quiet as the rain
I feel every feeling I hid
Inside a ribbon box long ago
The ones my mind forbid

I whisper to myself
That someday I'll be alright
But my big dreams like that
Don't come in sight

I wish upon every star
Begging God to make me okay
I'll trade anything right now
To make me see that way

The clouds roll on
But the rain still falls
I'm caught within myself
The one with a hopeless call

To save me from myself..


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1 posted 05-25-2009 11:34 AM       View Profile for JenniferMaxwell   Email JenniferMaxwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JenniferMaxwell

After the storm, the rainbow.

Very poignant, evocative and well written!
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@WOW.. so good i'm speachless..
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Love this, Zach!!!

The tips of my fingers
Start to bleed the thoughts
That overwhelm me

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4 posted 05-29-2009 01:55 PM       View Profile for nehematala   Email nehematala   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nehematala

Wow!!!!

If you don't like something,
Change it...
If you can't change it,
Change the way you think about it

Falling rain
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5 posted 05-31-2009 09:10 AM       View Profile for Falling rain   Email Falling rain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Falling rain's Home Page   View IP for Falling rain

Thanks for the comments everyone!

"Who are you to judge the life I live? I know I'm not perfect" - Bob Marley

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the ending climax is excellent, and the emotions and message this poem conveys are very powerful. i like it alot!
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i really loved the poem
the mood matched the setting perfectly
great work.
priyanka
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Sometimes i feel like a drop in the ocean
lost i am... to never be found...
you put it out so beautifully...
nice 2 know that someone out there feels the same way i do...

you put it so well...pain and suffering the storm signifies thats what your enclosed in... and then the sullen silence- sob u say..
i love it...
something meaningful
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9 posted 07-17-2009 08:46 PM       View Profile for something meaningful   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for something meaningful

you are an amazing writer! i love it! it just makes so much sense to me.
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I hav 2 say it, you should get your stuff PUBLISHED!! I mean it was just so... honest. Breathtakingly honest! You have a gift... your writing touches the soul, and makes you think a different perspective on life. I know it did that for me! Great job!

Always,
   Kai (a.k.a. precious pearls)

 
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